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Reviewer: whirlgirl Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30, 2012 8:15 pm Title: Chapter 1

I'm really impressed with the banter between Gus and Shawn. The way Shawn evades Gus' questions is so in character that I can imagine this happening in the series.

My constructive criticism: (I don't actually have anything to critique for this. I did spot one tense mistake but it wasn't blatantly obvious.)

Your characterisation was spot on for me. Even though Shawn was distressed he still seemed in character. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! And thanks for the constructive crit, it was my first time writing in present tense and I kept finding myself going back to past, so it was a little difficult.  Once again, thank you!

Reviewer: Checkerz Signed [Report This]
Date: April 20, 2012 9:28 pm Title: Chapter 1

How would you like to help co-author a story? I've been lookin for somebody who's great at yin/yang story. You can contact me if your interested. :)

Author's Response:

Hello,

 

Thanks for reviewing my story, I really appreciate it.  Sorry I didn't get back to you sooner, but I didn't see it.  :)  As for co-writing a story, it's definitely something I would consider.  Could you get me some more information?  

Thanks!

 

-Desi Jo

Reviewer: Susannanass Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 07, 2012 1:15 pm Title: Chapter 1

That*. Anyway, great job!

Reviewer: Susannanass Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 07, 2012 1:14 pm Title: Chapter 1

Great! I love it! Can't believe there are no replies yet! Absolutely fantastic. Often wondered why they all seemed to move on they quickly.

Author's Response: Thank you! I am so glad you enjoyed it!

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