Reading this again was nostalgic. It's just as good as I remember the many times I read it years ago.

My god, you're so spot on with the characters and the dialog! Thank you for letting me read this!

Hooked face is an image I did NOT need to think about in this lifetime. Ouchie.

Great story, great tone, great characters. I enjoy all your stuff but this one is my favourite, I think.

I laughed out loud at the whumpage reference. He does get treated abysmally, poor Shawn. And we're famous for it - look at that:

http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=whumpage

Ha ha, I love how you set up this even more uncomfortable situation by sticking these three in a boat together and remind the characters that "this is all Shawn's fault" (since he's the one complaining). lol. I love the awkwardness too as Shawn tries to renounce his impulses while Henry finally gets the engine going. LOL, I was giggling over Shawn's  Did no one understand the kind of time that went into creating a hairstyle that looked like no time had gone into creating it?

That is soooo Shawn. In fact, all of your characters remain true to each of their characters. I love that Shawn continues to try to be the center of attention, even among his least desirable audience, and is hurt when his they ignore him. 

OMG, I LOOVVVED Shawn using his sticky fingers in poor Lassiter's tackle box. I can so easily visualize what is going on throughout the whole story. :D I like that Henry refuses to indulge Shawn's behavior, though I can't picture Henry really ever seeing Shawn's behavior as "cutesy", but it must be especially annoying for his adult child to be acting the way that he always does in front of Lassiter, while they're all trapped in a boat, trying to fish. 

Lol, you know, I wouldn't put it past Henry to eat a dolphin, or even chop one up to feed to mini-Shawn. ;)  I love the detail you put into making their fishing accurate. This story reminds me a lot of fishing off the dock at a lake when I was a kid, or sitting in a boat in the middle of the lake, catching those tiny sunfish, which sometimes we didn't get back in the water fast enough.... Lol, Shawn getting criticized like Lassiter did about his pole holding technique by Henry! Nice touch! :) Hee hee, I love how Shawn tries to get Lassie in trouble with Henry, forcing Lassiter to say to get them to move on. LOL. ;D  Ha ha, loved this:

"That would be me," Henry said, his smile failing to come across as pleasant. "And you aren't going to feel a fish catch on--"

"You know," said Lassiter, sitting down suddenly. "I think it's really time we move on, I'm getting almost no action out here. We've pretty well cleared this spot."

"Agreed," Shawn said immediately, sitting abruptly on his rear. He finished his beer with a hard swig when Henry shot him an unimpressed look.

Henry didn't look pleased, but he knew Lassiter, even if Shawn had no idea what he was talking about, had a point. He sat as well, reaching back for the engine, and didn't miss the glance the other two shot at each other, camraderie, for one miniscule second, written on their faces.

LOL, poor Shawnie! "I ne'fer," he wheezed over the sound of Henry and Lassiter tinkering with the engine, "w'anted to em'p'athize w'ith a fish. Thank you," his lip throbbed and he winced, "so m'uch."

 Omg, I love that Vick happens to be at the ER waiting for her husband to get stitches, and she recognizes the three of them by the back of their heads. lol

She considered walking away, because whatever had brought this particular combination of characters here couldn't be good. Not these three.

 How cute is Shawn complimenting Vick who's holding her daughter? Aww. Except there's that pesky fish hook through the lip bloody mess to consider.... still cute though, the "softer" compliment. And her incredulousness is priceless: "All you did was taking him fishing?"! Lol, right? OMG, can I tell you how hilarious it is that they're all trying so very hard not to laugh?! :D She tried not to look amused. From what she could gather her old friend had taken his son--as well as her head detective--fishing, accidentally (she was assuming, but you could never be sure with this family) hooked him in the face (probably casting a line), and then gotten him well and soundly drunk. Before taking him to the emergency room.

OMG, LOL, I loved this:

"I'm saving him the aggravation. Later, when you're less..." she searched for a word.

"You," Lassiter filled in for her.

Shawn's list of "looking on the bright side" was just freaking hysterical, as well as the incredulous responses from Henry and Lassiter.

Aww, what a sweet bittersweet & poignant parting shot: "Lassiter watched them, Shawn whining and bemoaning his fate while Henry pushed and prodded him into a more comfortable position. Henry didn't speak and Shawn didn't open his eyes, but for a second, Lassiter was struck by the loss of the children his wife had thought he didn't want." 

Poor Lassie! *hugs him* 

Hee hee, I laughed and giggled all the way through this; the whump was a big yet funny surprise. Great job with this two parter! :D