Date: October 23, 2008 6:51 pm Title: Chapter 2
Ahh, too funny. I love the first chapter, but he idea of Shawn as a pickpocket is quite amusing.
Author's Response: I am glad you enjoyed it and I am glad you liked Shawn as a pickpocket!
Date: September 24, 2008 12:19 am Title: Chapter 3
WOW - I didn't see that ending coming at all!!!! Shawn isn't on the train - what's he going to do?! Can't wait!
Once again, excellent details - so many of them. Really fleshes out the story. And so much happens in each chapter - dialogue plus so many interesting points about the various characters. Still going well!!
Author's Response:
I am glad that you were surprised by the ending. It was actually one of the first bits I wanted in my story, a lot of the plot was put in motion just to achieve that. I don't know why but I really wanted to kick Shawn off of the train.
I am so glad that you appreciate the little details and everything, it was so much fun to write all of the little bits. And thank you once again for reviewing.
Date: September 23, 2008 9:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awesome job! Very funny. Reminds me of the movie Silverstreak with Gene Wilder. I loved the line about playing (or not playing) photographic memory I Spy. Fantabulous.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much. I have never seen Silver Streak, but I will have to as I am a fan of Gene Wilder.
I am glad you liked the bit with the photographic memory I Spy.
Anyway, I am glad you liked it and thanks for reviewing.
Date: September 19, 2008 11:14 pm Title: Chapter 2
Perfect banter in this chapter! Especially the "who is taking notes" one - so great! I also love the I Spy scene. Shawn would be horrible to play that game with! And poor Gus - flirting with a suspect! Great development - love where you are going.
Author's Response:
I would never play I-Spy with Shawn, seriously I have a feeling he would be impossible to beat. I am glad that you think the banter worked well in this chapter, it was a lot of fun to try to get into their heads and think about what they would say.
Thank you so, much, once again for reviewing. It is really nice to hear the parts that you liked in it.
Date: September 19, 2008 10:56 pm Title: Chapter 2
LOL! I like the post it thing, and I still love the I-Spy stuff! It's my favorite scene, and fabricy so should be a word!
Author's Response:
I think that we should start a campaign to introduce the word fabricy to the the world. You can start by teaching it to your students, and I will teach it to mine when I have some of my own.
I am glad that you liked the post it note. Your suggestion of pranking Gus when he was sleeping was great, and I thought that being able to throw in a bit of the meeting he was missing in could be a lot of fun.
I really do like the I-Spy bit as well, I am not that good at banter between Shawn and Gus, but I think it worked really well in that scene.
Date: September 16, 2008 7:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
Nice start, Blue! :-) You put a lot of work into this, and it really shows. Nice start to the second ep!
Author's Response: Thanks! I really have appreciated your support.