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Loved the commentary, Mia.

I'll probably be back with more later, but I just wanted to put something in. Though you said the whole "So and so is my dad," is cliche, and it is to some extent, but I think it's something Shawn would say.
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Loved the commentary, Mia.

I'll probably be back with more later, but I just wanted to put something in. Though you said the whole "So and so is my dad," is cliche, and it is to some extent, but I think it's something Shawn would say.
Yeah, that's why I kept it. A lot of the time I write something, and it seems to fit. Looking back I'll realize it's a cliche, or it can be construed as something pervy when it totally isn't (though, truth be told, my mind is pervier than most, and what I find pervy isn't necessarily what someone else would find pervy), but if it fits it fits, and try as I might, nothing else will do.

Dialogue is a lot about flow. Don't use a cliche just for the sake of it, but if it fits, then sure, why not?
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